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Cigarette by ~Dana-the-drunken-lep:iconDana-the-drunken-lep:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open




We have evolved beyond
chemical equations,
and reach out
as if to touch
the incomprehensible.
My star-shining soul
is with you,
still overcome by my feminine respiration
you never shared.
C6H12O6
You are a cigarette
to the society within these four walls,
standing at the edge of the earth.
The seductiveness of familiar addiction,
you're still savouring
the lingering taste of unnecessary.
This carbon monoxide
is filling my veins,
stealing my cleansing
for tar-clogged memories
of life, unscrubbable, as it was.
Precious,
you create a tired being...
With ashes from our grave
I'll paint you to me
each morning,
and the great pretense continues
as you sing me a smoke-filled
goodbye sonnet,
my eyes still bleeding for the lost.
©2004-2009 ~Dana-the-drunken-lep
:icondana-the-drunken-lep:

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Smoke me smoke me. Photo care of google.ie who found it for me, and whatever site it so happened to have come from. Yarrr.

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~toxicd Aug 21, 2004, 12:40:23 AM
This is the perfect picture of a bad relationship. Just like a drug, it can feel good and get you intoxicated, but leave you empty and needing another fix, only to end up as a shell of a person when it's all said and done. It takes a long time to recover. There should be AA meetings for it..

Then you say, "Hello, my name is... . I'm a recovering lover."

So glad you explained to me "feminine respiration". ^_~ Yep... "Still overcome by my feelings that you never shared" - that really sums it up quite nicely.

I like the phrase "Seductiveness of familiar addiction". It's the "I've grown used to you" concept when you think you won't be able to live without something - even if it's hurting you - simply because it's what you've known for so long... ~_~

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If you are what you eat... I could be you by morning. :devilish:

My evil clubs - how I love them
~wlf ~impure-souls ~cotd ~Alice-fanclub
:icondana-the-drunken-lep:
~Dana-the-drunken-lep Aug 21, 2004, 1:39:50 AM
You know I really do love you, however you got inside my head. :heart:
Thankyou for reading and commenting on my poems, it really means so much to me ^__^ :sushi: You're the one inspiring me to write at all, now, so, >_>; I blame you! :ninja: nack nack nack
:iconiselen:
~Iselen Aug 21, 2004, 4:49:46 AM
o_O relationships suck-
Cigarettes rule.
._.

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LOL.
:icondana-the-drunken-lep:
~Dana-the-drunken-lep Aug 21, 2004, 2:39:44 PM
Lmao, thankyou Zola. Yes, you can tell you've influenced me, can't you? XD
:icontoxicd:
~toxicd Aug 21, 2004, 6:32:46 PM
aww.. I'm touched. That's sweet. I'm glad I inspire somebody. I just like to encourage and hope people listen.

You have good poetry, so it's a pleasure read them and comment. I like the insights hidden in your stuff.

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If you are what you eat... I could be you by morning. :devilish:

My evil clubs - how I love them
~wlf ~impure-souls ~cotd ~Alice-fanclub
:iconiselen:
~Iselen Aug 22, 2004, 3:36:02 AM
You and Me = Team Smokey.

n_n

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LOL.
:icondana-the-drunken-lep:
~Dana-the-drunken-lep Aug 22, 2004, 12:01:30 PM
Lmfao now all we need is a logo XD
:icondarkinsanerhi:
~DarkInsaneRhi Aug 29, 2004, 2:35:27 PM
o.o Think i'll just agree with everything said and leave it at that.

-cough-

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X.x Beware me.


o.o I did not create my avvie, and I do not know who did, other wise I would give credit -dies- x.x
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